Dream Deep

I don't know what you were so worried about, Gyr, this is great. ^_^ Much more coherent and engaging than many other essays I've read. And I have to say, ...

Oh, I liked it a lot, Mandax. Involves a piano, what's not to like? ^_^ In fact, that only parts where I thought it lacked were the very first and ...

Er... I told you to click the 'Literary' tab up top... ^_^ Then on into the Poetry forums. No matter, we'll have Imp move it. (Thank you, Imp, for finding ...

Again, as in the case of 'Act' - superb writing, Clau, set against a background of the shocking. It's powerful and deeply disturbing at the same time. The reader feels ...

And it's Fedya's Sketch! ^_^ Polished up, dressed up and revised, of course. It's come along nicely since the original posting on SBS, Imp. I can't take credit for that, ...

Good rhyme scheme, Clau, it's quite solid and reads well. I don't think the length is a problem at all, to be honest - it's just as long as it ...

Hi Jess - I'm glad I finally got a chance to look at some of your poetry. This is pretty good for one of your first works; the underlying emotion ...

I'm afraid I shall have to disagree with Soul, here, I found the beginning wonderful. Just the right length, too - the lyrical description of the music and then the ...

Must... post...more. Because I already critted this. ;) And I want to read more. *holds Gyr hostage* Now look at all the free time you have to write. It's like ...

Beautiful, Gummy, as could be expected. ^_~ You always manage to capture such beautiful images and emotions in your poetry - I really have nothing derogatory to say. The wording ...

I loved it, Clau. ^_~ I wouldn't be able to write humor when in my best frame of mind, let alone in the middle of anxious worry. ;) I liked ...

Beautiful, cadmium, simply beautiful. The last stanza is the best. In fact, the only spot(s) I would recomend some editing is in the first stanza, the description. She, round edges ...

Oy, Alanna, if you intend to post serious pieces and get serious feedback, at least do your readers the common courtesy of proofreading your work before you post it, yeah? ...

Beautiful, Yoha. The kind of story that my dad would cry through. ^_~ As you say, you haven't done too much editing, but the only thing I can really point ...

Ah, this needs spacing. The forums don't convert well from Word, so between every paragraph you need to space it out. It would make it much easier to read. I'll ...